tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3588286618702079946.post588273279803588304..comments2023-08-28T06:19:55.935-07:00Comments on R.S. Bohn: Just Don't Tell Me I Suck! and The Words, They Are Always There, Unlike Your Cold HandsR.S. Bohnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09101260459422806220noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3588286618702079946.post-42654698127762293082010-09-07T12:17:29.580-07:002010-09-07T12:17:29.580-07:00Thank you. That's a great insight -- I like th...Thank you. That's a great insight -- I like the opening bits, but once I hit, "He's got it," then it begins to unravel. Like a sock that started out great, but now, nobody can wear it. LOL. <br /><br />Also, yes, I think you have a point re: too much space left. You know I like to leave things up to the reader, but in this case, I think I've been too vague.<br /><br />Thank you again! You've been really helpful.R.S. Bohnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09101260459422806220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3588286618702079946.post-87853131643006494342010-09-07T12:05:41.673-07:002010-09-07T12:05:41.673-07:00I think this story is perfectly crafted up until t...I think this story is perfectly crafted up until the sentence ”He´s got it.” Then it becomes a bit messy. I like Pamela and I like the last paragraph, but there´s something about the parts in between. I´m all for leaving lots of space to the reader, not over-explaining everything but allow people to make their own interpretations and draw their own conclusions. This story however, benefits from your comment about zombies, and that makes me think that maybe you should include something pointing the reader in that direction. The title is obviously a clue as well, and a good one, it adds to the story. But yeah, maybe some more guidance to what you´re going for. <br /><br />I really like the idea, what a sucky special ability! Totally creepy, I can´t see why you wouldn´t get this published in horror or sci fi/end of days places =)asuqihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05478950013985706858noreply@blogger.com